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Laetitiaaaaaa!!!!!! Hi! This was really, really, good! I'd just add in one word in the last line... Like: With winter's *insert word here* long since gone... cause it would make ...

Hi! Nice to see some more of your work! The first thing I noticed was how much of an improvement this is from the first piece of yours I read. ...

And then, the world ended. The stars fell down like tear drops, and I caught them in my palms as they trickled to the earth. And I fell right through ...

Thanks for all your comments and suggestions everyone. I wasn't sure how this would do, considering I wrote it in about three minutes. But this makes me happy... fells like ...

Hi everyone. This is different than anything I've really written before, and I know that the lines seem to break in unusual places, but they're meant to. Critiques are greatly ...

Oh if the world were just a dream, Would you be happy when you woke? And if your life were just the same, What would you do when you found ...

Um.... When I click on the site it says your pig ate it! :D

Wow great poem, and I see no problem with the rhyming. In this line... My maths is ever daunting Is there a reason for the 's' that I'm missing? I ...

I was quickly scrolling down the home page and was about to click the exit button at the top, when I saw your user name and immediately clicked on this ...

This is a well written poem, but I would call it a bit too flowery. By this I mean that there are a lot of extra adjectives where simply the ...

As they say: "Short and Sweet." :D A good and simple little poem here, but I do have a few suggestions: Song in My Head A simple tune Playing in ...

mikedb1492: Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it. Piranha: Wow, thanks this really helps! I can understand the places where you got confused, sometimes I have trouble with writing ...

Hi all! This is my entry for the 'On Fire' contest, and I could really use some help with it, feel free to be as harsh as you want please. ...

he sat With her hand on her forehead. Confused and hopelessly distressed. He came And sat next to her. He hoped he wouldn’t be a pest. I would try and ...

Two words: Right on!